Wednesday, March 26, 2014

Wicked Wednesday - Of Blood and Sorrow


Wicked Wednesday will be on hiatus over April. Not only will the A to Z Challenge be happening which I'll be participating with a group on Untethered Realms, I have my mother visiting for a week, and my husband's and son's birthdays. Lots going on. I'm giving myself a little break and easing off on blogging.

As many of you know, I've been working on revisions all this year. One of my manuscripts is a paranormal romance called OF BLOOD AND SORROW (formerly known as "Sorrow Phage"). I hope to get this polished to query before the end of this school semester. I'm going to tease you with my query blurb.

Erin Driscol works the perfect job consoling fellow demons by feeding off their grief at Putzkammer & Sons Funeral Home.

When fledgling vampire Nicolas Reese wakes in the mortuary, Erin hastily sets him loose on the city before she regains enough sense to call a hunter. Vampires are vile, unnatural creatures, or so she thinks. Nicolas returns to her for help, and she learns the truth behind the legends. Breaking all the rules, Erin hides him from his sire and vampire hunters. But when the Putzkammers begin to die off one by one, she must find a way to save the family that loves her. While every demon desperately searches for a way to survive whatever horror is slaughtering them in the night, Erin faces her greatest fear to rescue Nicolas from his dark fate.

Would this blurb snag your attention?

18 comments:

  1. Ohhhh, querying. Yay. I actually have a question about that on my blog if you have a second to stop by and dole out some advice. :)

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  2. The more I read OBaS, the more I realize OBaS is a perfect title. :)

    That first line in particular snags me. It makes me wonder what will happen to her perfect job.

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  3. That blurb piques one's interest. Good luck querying.

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  4. It sounds like you do have a lot on your plate! Good luck with all of it!

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  5. Happy b-day to your hubs and son! Enjoy your time with your mother. Spending time with family is so incredibly important. Have fun celebrating!!

    This crazy Bird signed up for the A-Z, even though I have no idea how in the world I am going to accomplish it. I am going to give it my best shot. Against all odds, last year, I was able to complete it. My hope is I can pull it off again this year. Keep you fingers crossed for me K?

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  6. I think the second part of the blurb is more catching than the first part. Hope this helps. Have a great day!

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  7. This is me with my editor hat on: I like the first sentence/paragraph. But the following paragraph is confusing to me. What do you mean by "regains enough sense"? Are the Putzkammers mortals or demons? Suddenly you mention they are "the family that loves her." How did she end up with them if they are not her actual family?

    I know you're trying to make it mysterious so they'll want to read more, but I think you'll need to pick the primary plot and build a blurb around that rather than toss so much in. Never mind her setting him loose; start with "When fledgling vampire Nicolas Reese comes to Erin for help, she learns the truth behind the legends and hides him from his sire and the vampire hunters who seek him. But when the Putzkammers begin to die one by one, Erin is caught between her act of kindness and the need to save her adopted family. Only by facing her own personal demons can she stop the slaughter and still rescue Nicolas from his dark fate." Or something like that. (Just a suggestion.)

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  8. You should enjoy your break. Happy birthday to your little guy!!

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  9. *shivers* That sounds like something I'll totally pick up. (Notice the tense on that? Uh-huh.)

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  10. Ooo! Your novel sounds wonderfully delicious. Enjoy the break. See you at UR :D

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  11. Oh, wow! I love the premise!
    Get it published, quick! LOL

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  12. Thank you for your comments and advice, everyone. Blurbs aren't my strong point. I appreciate all your help.

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  13. Hi Christine,

    Your blurb, now that I know what a blurb is, sums it up rather nicely. Yes, this snags my attention.

    Enjoy that break. I shall pretend I didn't see mention of that dreaded alphabet challenge :)

    Gary

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  14. Querying terrifies me, but I think the blurb is great! Definitely interests me!

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  16. Yes, I think it would.

    I like the fact that the blurb reflects your own writing style.

    I agree that as you read it for the first time, you get a sense of mystery and need to read it for a second time to catch all of the connections and subtleties, but I don't find that to be a bad thing. Quite the opposite. I want to read something that is complex and multi layered, and I want to do some thinking, rather than having everything oversimplified and laid out for me. It is part of what would make pick up that book over many others.

    I think your writing style is one of your biggest strengths.

    When can we read it 😉

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  17. The blurb reads pretty well. About the only thing that made me pause was the length of the first line.

    Erin Driscol works the perfect job consoling fellow demons by feeding off their grief at Putzkammer & Sons Funeral Home.

    might be

    Erin Driscol works the perfect job. She consoles fellow demons by feeding off their grief at Putzkammer & Sons Funeral Home.

    But it's hook-y enough without the change too.

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  18. Loving the blurb! I already want to read more about Erin and Nicolas... :)

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