Wednesday, April 10, 2013

A to Z Challenge 2013 - I is for Indiana

I'm posting snippets from a story for this year's Challenge.
If you'd like to read the whole tale, please start with A.

I IS FOR INDIANA

Danielle blushed when Erik smiled at her from across the bar. She waved and hoped the lighting was dim enough to hide the rosiness in her cheeks. It was ten years too late for her to be giggling like a boy crazy teenager, but one silly little laugh threatened to escape.

She managed to walk over to where he was seated with some sense of grace. Her stomach tightened as he stood to greet her. Erik wasn't only a great father, but a gentleman too. If all the single women in Indiana knew what a catch he was, they'd be flocking to his house.

This was the first time she'd seen him in jeans. His tailored suits gave him a trim figure, but the jeans, oh my. Danielle had to force her eyes to focus on his face.

Was she smiling too widely? Would he like her perfume? She needed a drink. What would he think if she drank beer form a bottle or snorted when she laughed?

She caught him dragging his gaze up too.

"Hi." At least she didn't lose her voice.

28 comments:

  1. Aw, this snippet is adorable! I love how awkward Danielle is, and how sweet Erik seems to be so far. :)

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  2. It's never too late to giggle. (:
    Sweet excerpt. I'd be afraid of snorting out a laugh too. :D

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  3. Where in Indiana are they? Inquiring minds want to know, lol

    A-Z

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  4. I had to giggle when you gave a shout out to Indiana. I love the encounter they have, thanks!

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  5. You really put us inside her head! This one is sweet.

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  6. Jeans would do that to you ... :)

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  7. This is great! I love her awkwardness. It's fun to get into her head like that.

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  9. Great snippet.
    No, not the dreaded giggle. I don't care how old a woman gets, the giggle will always find a way to escape.

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  10. ooh!what a cute moment :)love it.
    Nutschell
    www.thewritingnut.com

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  11. Nice. But I wish I knew more about what Danielle looks like.

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  12. He was probably just as nervous as she was, if not more so :)

    Nice snippet.

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  13. Ah, the insecurities, even when we're supposedly all grown up!

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  14. Yes - at least she didn't lose her voice. That would've been embarrassing! I loved this snippet!

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  15. Very cute and I have such a nice image of Erik in my mind now. Yum. :D

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  16. t was ten years too late for her to be giggling like a boy crazy teenager - I'm damned then! LOL

    I love those first butterflies of a new romance, and you described them wonderfully here.

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  17. Thanks to all! I'm glad I could get the giddiness across. I'm excited for Danielle myself!

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  18. Poor Danielle, she's too nervous!

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  19. Hi Christine,

    What a delightful snippet. And yep, keep focusing on the face :)

    Thanks and now I have the song, "Indiana wants me, but I can't go back there...."

    Happy alphabeting.

    Gary :)

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  20. Oh, I can feel those questions, wondering what the guy thinks of her.

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  21. this guy better be a good guy and not a monster in disguise.

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  22. Great snippet! Love that she snorts . . .LOL. :)

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  23. I love that its set in Indiana-- all that undercurrent of feeling in such an understated state. Great snippet.

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  24. I think I might be in love with Erik. *sigh*

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  25. Busted... I really liked that.

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